Tuesday, February 21, 2012

I saw her



Today, while sitting alone
Gazing the blue sky
With lenticular clouds around
And meandering shapes
Her aroma
Carried with Zephyr
Stirred the blood
And deluged the emotions

Her sensation
To relived the past

Out of a clear sky
It started to rain
Crippling her reflections

Through the spectral colors
For the last time
I saw her
Any resemblance to living or dead is purely adventurous... 

27 comments:

  1. wow Rachit that's quite a write ... and I just loved the subtle twist in the end.

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    1. Thanks :) and yeah with me its the end that hurt the most!

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    1. welcome to WL.. and thanks for such lovely words :)

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  3. The rain washed away the rainbow...? Nice.

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    1. rainbow tunes the eye to see her again for the last time, probably !

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  4. I cant make up my mind if its romantic or sad , the link to the last one is sad ..

    But loved the poem :)

    Bikram's

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  5. and maybe its true.. rains do ignite passion and inspiration many a times.. but sometimes it's the companion who's presence it personifies.. :)

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    1. may be rains have an inverted image :)

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  6. complex, twisted love..
    loved the deep expressions !!

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  7. Beautiful!
    Her sensation evoked the heart..

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  8. If there's one thing I tell poets, it's what my literature professor told me: Specify and fine tune your imagery. With the constraints of the poetic structure, we are challenged to make the most out of it. So when we say we're hurt, 'how does the pain feel like?' 'Does it sting like a bee?' 'Does it cut like a knife?' 'Does it bleed like flashflood?' I got your message. And I think you have potential. I'm just giving points for improvement. :)

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  9. Megha: thanks :) keep coming back

    Neha: yeah.. it is... welcome to Weakest LINK:)

    Bessy E: thanks for the insights and welcome to Weakest LINK :)

    Juhi: love it :)

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